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Seriously i don't like the poem (am entitiled to my opinion) Its for a reason, you first of all made me think he left you which later prove false, again ...

Your work is a nice one i enjoy your use of word it was nice but the fluence of it been a poem was not the too much description and ...

It was a good poem all in all. I could have review this poem properly but am browsing with my phone. But there are a few tips i hope they ...

Wow i must say i did not enjoy the poem at all if its a poem, your puntuations were too much and misplaced. The idea of the "poem" was blunt ...

Hi your poem is beautiful there is nothing worst than growing up and leaving ones childhood friend. But your first stanza and the rest part of the poem were different ...

Welcome first of all to YWS, and the best way to start is to review 3 work of others before you post. Your introduction before the poem wasn't necessary and ...

What am it to critique in this poem is the concept which i dont think make sense at all, a poem should be clear with few words but what i ...

I think the story is beautiful i definetly need cindy. But i still did not see the rythm and puntuations would have easy things, i read thru it like a ...

First i must welcome you to YWS and taking the courage to write a post, you did well. But i must confess your poem needs a lot of puntuation, and ...

Your poem is beautiful to the ears your choice of words were perfect. But what is the focus of the poem? Is it to describe "Carolyn sweetness" to us? (stanza ...

First thing first you have been advice to check out script writting forums, but you have to also noted is that the character name doesn't change what the hell is ...

I really relate with the story cause i am currently in Tyler's position. I like the way Tyler showed remorse when mentioning Jens name it shows that he still has ...

You did a nice job with your story. The formating aspect has been covered. But then your transition between emotions was cold. Like after the service man assume the girl ...

Intresting story it was i like the story line it was good. But it was definitely not a script for sure. For proper script formating PM and one other thing ...

You did a great job especially with d part below.... With a sad, sweet face And kiss me gently My heart starts to race ....The rythm between face and race ...